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Okay...so there's this contest on TokyoPop called Rising Stars of Manga and I decided to enter it...
So here is the first page of the Manga and I'm open for comments/opinions/feedback.
It's read right to left (panel wise) but text is read left to right. Not too complicated if you don't know how Manga works.
http://img519.imageshack.us/img519/1646/untitled1mc6.jpg
http://img371.imageshack.us/my.php?image=untitled2dl9.jpg
So here is the first page of the Manga and I'm open for comments/opinions/feedback.
It's read right to left (panel wise) but text is read left to right. Not too complicated if you don't know how Manga works.
http://img519.imageshack.us/img519/1646/untitled1mc6.jpg
http://img371.imageshack.us/my.php?image=untitled2dl9.jpg
z0mg, that's how bleach, naruto, airgear, and EVEN POGEYMANZ started! (not a smart comment) but yes...
the reason why they're already arguing is because I have to get the whole story into 15-20 pages while it usually takes 40-50 pages to get everything set correctly. It also engages the reader if IIRC instead of an old, boring "My name is....I'm a highschool student..." but yes, if others feel that I've rushed into things, then I will gladly take into consideration into changing it.
the reason why they're already arguing is because I have to get the whole story into 15-20 pages while it usually takes 40-50 pages to get everything set correctly. It also engages the reader if IIRC instead of an old, boring "My name is....I'm a highschool student..." but yes, if others feel that I've rushed into things, then I will gladly take into consideration into changing it.
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| z0mg, that's how bleach, naruto, airgear, and EVEN POGEYMANZ started! (not a smart comment) but yes... the reason why they're already arguing is because I have to get the whole story into 15-20 pages while it usually takes 40-50 pages to get everything set correctly. It also engages the reader if IIRC instead of an old, boring "My name is....I'm a highschool student..." but yes, if others feel that I've rushed into things, then I will gladly take into consideration into changing it. |
I'm not talking about page 1. I'm talking about page 2. These guys weren't introduced at all. Most of the time, when introducing characters already doing something, it just shows one character, then adds one character to the scene at a time, calling out names and such for the reader/viewer to get into their heads.
Page 2 is the "fight" I'm actually talking about, because they're arguing as well.
Page 2 is the "fight" I'm actually talking about, because they're arguing as well.
I've entered RSOM a few times, and lost every single one....but besides that, here's some tips.
A long story will NOT fit into 15 pages. It just does not work at all. You need time to establish the characters and situations, the begining, middle, and it MUST have and end, otherwise it isn't a short story, but just a chapter that gets cut short. Better to tell one particular incident in a character's life than explain a large chapter of a life in so few pages. A story can start off with an arguement, but if it's carried through the majority of pages, you need to focus on resolving that before the story ends. A short story can't afford to branch off like long stories do, keep it short and sweet.
Art wise, you need to work on anatomy and backgrounds. I thought it would be somewhat passible looking at page one then I saw page 2 and noticed how bland the backgrounds look.
STUDY FROM LIFE AND OTHER ARTISTS.
That is the best advice I can give. Cliche, but true.
Back when I was like that I put off entering for another 2 contests to improve my skills. I noticed a considerable difference in my first entry compared to my last one. Even if I didn't win, I now I improved and that was some comfort at least.
Also, I see nothing wrong with getting inspiration from other styles, but they really do look like certian established charaters, TOO much so in fact, you may run the risk of disqualifacation, IMO.
Good luck though. Even if you don't win, you can get good practice from this at least. I have no interest in continuing to enter these contests, but I learned alot about pacing, writing, and managing my time through this contest.
A long story will NOT fit into 15 pages. It just does not work at all. You need time to establish the characters and situations, the begining, middle, and it MUST have and end, otherwise it isn't a short story, but just a chapter that gets cut short. Better to tell one particular incident in a character's life than explain a large chapter of a life in so few pages. A story can start off with an arguement, but if it's carried through the majority of pages, you need to focus on resolving that before the story ends. A short story can't afford to branch off like long stories do, keep it short and sweet.
Art wise, you need to work on anatomy and backgrounds. I thought it would be somewhat passible looking at page one then I saw page 2 and noticed how bland the backgrounds look.
STUDY FROM LIFE AND OTHER ARTISTS.
That is the best advice I can give. Cliche, but true.
Back when I was like that I put off entering for another 2 contests to improve my skills. I noticed a considerable difference in my first entry compared to my last one. Even if I didn't win, I now I improved and that was some comfort at least.
Also, I see nothing wrong with getting inspiration from other styles, but they really do look like certian established charaters, TOO much so in fact, you may run the risk of disqualifacation, IMO.
Good luck though. Even if you don't win, you can get good practice from this at least. I have no interest in continuing to enter these contests, but I learned alot about pacing, writing, and managing my time through this contest.
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